+ = things I liked
- = things I didn't like (good luck finding some of these)
Chapter 11:
-Why would Fett be ordering troops around?
-Han seemed to heal pretty quickly from hibernation sickness, so why would Jaina know so much about it. And yes, Fett was present when Han came out of carbonite, but he was busy getting killed (yes, killed) by a giant mouth in the desert.
-What does "endex" mean and why must she write it so often?
-Jacen can feel ships? Shouldn't it be he can feel the emotions of the people in the ship? Or did some backwater culture teach him how to read rivets and hull plating?
Chapter 12:
-Why would Zekk be capable of producing the phantom fleet? Was his name just dropped because she realized he hadn't been mentioned yet? To my recollection he hasn't show that kind of ability before, so why would he now?
-Again, why didn't Luke just kill Jacen when he had the chance? Screw Jaina being the Sword and all that, just kill the idiot already.
-Luke was able to break that many pieces off of Jacen's X-wing and it didn't explode? Are Stealth X's made of LEGOs?
-"Short of them until Incom deliver" (pg. 225) There needs to be an s on the end of deliver.
-Wish Jaina would make up her mind about whether or not she knows her twin because she switches back and forth every single page.
-They're already letting Jaina be part of the Mando strike team? They don't trust her to begin with because she's a Jedi, they make her fix parts in a place by herself, but let's have her tag along on a secret mission from an Imperial Admiral everyone thinks is dead. What?
-Mandos are freaking mind readers. They wouldn't know Jaina thinks they're gossiping about her unless she actually said something about it to them.
-"Life didn't center on [Jaina's] small circle, another reminder that there was a wider world she seldom saw." SERIOUSLY? Jaina was pretty much raised by Winter, Threepio, and Chewie because her parents were off building a government and helping other people. I'm sure she would be all too aware of the plights of others.
-Jaina is not going to leave the Jedi to move to Mandalore. Her title is Sword of the Jedi, not Beskad of the Mandos.
Chapter 13:
-If Jacen knows all these techniques then how did Luke fool him and why isn't Jaina training with Luke?
-Non-Force users do not equal mundane, just look at how you write your precious Mandos, you idiot.
-"of this world" --> once again using Earthspeak.
-Tahiri saying only "Vong"? Doubt it.
-So an advantage of being a Sith is having a built in DRADIS in your head? Not so sure about that one.
-The GA can't notice a whole fleet "hiding" right in front of them? Especially after Luke asked to talk to Jacen at the orbitals?
-Why is it a bridge on one ship and CIC on another?
-Jacen is not a fighter ace, so why would he possess that kind of mentality?
Chapter 14:
-"B-list planets" (page 294) -- since, once again, the GFFA doesn't use our alphabet this is yet another example of Earthspeak.
-How does Pellaeon know Luke caused the phantom fleet? Did Luke tell him ahead of time?
-"There was a lot to be said about keeping his powder dry" (pg 295)--what is that supposed to mean?
-Boo to killing Pellaeon
Chapter 15:
+I'm beginning to mentally picture Daala as the Female Q from the Voyager episode of "The Q and the Grey"
-"B-team moffs" (pg 310) see previous complaints about the alphabet and Earthspeak
+Finally the Mandos think Jedi are impressive
-Another Naboo reference
Chapter 16:
-Just more blah storytelling, questionable characterizations, and awkwardly worded sentences.
Chapter 17:
-Again with "endex"
-"Ben had once said to her that he used the GAG helmet comlinks, because the Force was all well and good, but he needed to send and receive complex information in apparent silence, and the Force was pretty poor at that." (pg. 333) Yes, because it's not like Palpatine could communicate clearly with Ben's own mother across the galaxy clearly, or like the Jedi have battle melds or use silent communication in their Stealth X's. Please.
-Love that Jaina is acting like she's new to military protocol. It's not liked she became a military pilot at the age of sixteen or anything. Oh wait...
-"Mirta shouldn't have been able to beat a Jedi's reaction time. But she did." (Page 334) Of course she did, because Mandos pwn the galaxy. (FYI: I hate internet/cell phone lingo, and it really pained me to type it, but it's the only way I could accurately reflect my feelings.)
Chapter 18:
-When would Jaina have had a chance to know Pelleaon really well like Traviss thinks she did?
-Daala on page 342: "No Jedi Council. Keep them in their box, away from politics, and certainly never arm them." Well, I'm certainly glad Traviss was able to keep her personal bias against Jedi out of the book like she said she did.
-Would Fett and Daala really know who Tahiri is and her Vong association? Fett maybe in a briefing from Jaina that we didn't see, but Daala?
-Names on the top of page 352--who are they and why do I care?
Chapter 19:
-Han calling Ben "sweetheart" on page 363? Probably something more like "Kid" would've been appropriate, not a term of endearment Han reserves for the women in his life.
-Why would Fett know specifically that part of Mace Windu's death involved the Jedi falling out of a window? Incredibly unlikely.
-Enough with "barve".
+Do enjoy the use of "detritus".
+At least they are pushing Jaina/Jag
-Oh, I never cared about Fett family drama, and I'm certainly not going to start now.
Chapter 20:
-Daala and her "eyelids"? (page 398) You make a big deal about how she's lost an eye and then you suddenly give it back to her? Pay attention to what you write.
-Even the Mandos think Jaina should've gone to Luke for training.
Overall, I give this book a 0.2/10. It sucked big time, as have Traviss's other two books. And naturally, Lex would give this an 8/10 in the Lit forums. But thankfully YodaKenobi was there with his amazing thesis/review of the book. If you haven't read it yet, you should.
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mustafear asked, here is the link to Yobi's review. I really meant to post this the first time, but I was tired and cranky and didn't want to search for more than two minutes for it.
- = things I didn't like (good luck finding some of these)
Chapter 11:
-Why would Fett be ordering troops around?
-Han seemed to heal pretty quickly from hibernation sickness, so why would Jaina know so much about it. And yes, Fett was present when Han came out of carbonite, but he was busy getting killed (yes, killed) by a giant mouth in the desert.
-What does "endex" mean and why must she write it so often?
-Jacen can feel ships? Shouldn't it be he can feel the emotions of the people in the ship? Or did some backwater culture teach him how to read rivets and hull plating?
Chapter 12:
-Why would Zekk be capable of producing the phantom fleet? Was his name just dropped because she realized he hadn't been mentioned yet? To my recollection he hasn't show that kind of ability before, so why would he now?
-Again, why didn't Luke just kill Jacen when he had the chance? Screw Jaina being the Sword and all that, just kill the idiot already.
-Luke was able to break that many pieces off of Jacen's X-wing and it didn't explode? Are Stealth X's made of LEGOs?
-"Short of them until Incom deliver" (pg. 225) There needs to be an s on the end of deliver.
-Wish Jaina would make up her mind about whether or not she knows her twin because she switches back and forth every single page.
-They're already letting Jaina be part of the Mando strike team? They don't trust her to begin with because she's a Jedi, they make her fix parts in a place by herself, but let's have her tag along on a secret mission from an Imperial Admiral everyone thinks is dead. What?
-Mandos are freaking mind readers. They wouldn't know Jaina thinks they're gossiping about her unless she actually said something about it to them.
-"Life didn't center on [Jaina's] small circle, another reminder that there was a wider world she seldom saw." SERIOUSLY? Jaina was pretty much raised by Winter, Threepio, and Chewie because her parents were off building a government and helping other people. I'm sure she would be all too aware of the plights of others.
-Jaina is not going to leave the Jedi to move to Mandalore. Her title is Sword of the Jedi, not Beskad of the Mandos.
Chapter 13:
-If Jacen knows all these techniques then how did Luke fool him and why isn't Jaina training with Luke?
-Non-Force users do not equal mundane, just look at how you write your precious Mandos, you idiot.
-"of this world" --> once again using Earthspeak.
-Tahiri saying only "Vong"? Doubt it.
-So an advantage of being a Sith is having a built in DRADIS in your head? Not so sure about that one.
-The GA can't notice a whole fleet "hiding" right in front of them? Especially after Luke asked to talk to Jacen at the orbitals?
-Why is it a bridge on one ship and CIC on another?
-Jacen is not a fighter ace, so why would he possess that kind of mentality?
Chapter 14:
-"B-list planets" (page 294) -- since, once again, the GFFA doesn't use our alphabet this is yet another example of Earthspeak.
-How does Pellaeon know Luke caused the phantom fleet? Did Luke tell him ahead of time?
-"There was a lot to be said about keeping his powder dry" (pg 295)--what is that supposed to mean?
-Boo to killing Pellaeon
Chapter 15:
+I'm beginning to mentally picture Daala as the Female Q from the Voyager episode of "The Q and the Grey"
-"B-team moffs" (pg 310) see previous complaints about the alphabet and Earthspeak
+Finally the Mandos think Jedi are impressive
-Another Naboo reference
Chapter 16:
-Just more blah storytelling, questionable characterizations, and awkwardly worded sentences.
Chapter 17:
-Again with "endex"
-"Ben had once said to her that he used the GAG helmet comlinks, because the Force was all well and good, but he needed to send and receive complex information in apparent silence, and the Force was pretty poor at that." (pg. 333) Yes, because it's not like Palpatine could communicate clearly with Ben's own mother across the galaxy clearly, or like the Jedi have battle melds or use silent communication in their Stealth X's. Please.
-Love that Jaina is acting like she's new to military protocol. It's not liked she became a military pilot at the age of sixteen or anything. Oh wait...
-"Mirta shouldn't have been able to beat a Jedi's reaction time. But she did." (Page 334) Of course she did, because Mandos pwn the galaxy. (FYI: I hate internet/cell phone lingo, and it really pained me to type it, but it's the only way I could accurately reflect my feelings.)
Chapter 18:
-When would Jaina have had a chance to know Pelleaon really well like Traviss thinks she did?
-Daala on page 342: "No Jedi Council. Keep them in their box, away from politics, and certainly never arm them." Well, I'm certainly glad Traviss was able to keep her personal bias against Jedi out of the book like she said she did.
-Would Fett and Daala really know who Tahiri is and her Vong association? Fett maybe in a briefing from Jaina that we didn't see, but Daala?
-Names on the top of page 352--who are they and why do I care?
Chapter 19:
-Han calling Ben "sweetheart" on page 363? Probably something more like "Kid" would've been appropriate, not a term of endearment Han reserves for the women in his life.
-Why would Fett know specifically that part of Mace Windu's death involved the Jedi falling out of a window? Incredibly unlikely.
-Enough with "barve".
+Do enjoy the use of "detritus".
+At least they are pushing Jaina/Jag
-Oh, I never cared about Fett family drama, and I'm certainly not going to start now.
Chapter 20:
-Daala and her "eyelids"? (page 398) You make a big deal about how she's lost an eye and then you suddenly give it back to her? Pay attention to what you write.
-Even the Mandos think Jaina should've gone to Luke for training.
Overall, I give this book a 0.2/10. It sucked big time, as have Traviss's other two books. And naturally, Lex would give this an 8/10 in the Lit forums. But thankfully YodaKenobi was there with his amazing thesis/review of the book. If you haven't read it yet, you should.
Since
mustafear asked, here is the link to Yobi's review. I really meant to post this the first time, but I was tired and cranky and didn't want to search for more than two minutes for it.- Location:My Desk
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Comments
I did like Ben's characterization though.
LOL. I'll have to read YodaKenobi's review.
YodaKenobi's review was so awesome, and it made me happy to read it. :D
Ugh. I hate Mandos. Why do they have to be so awesome in Karen Traviss!World?!
<3s so much your review (and YodaKenobi's)